Wake Me

Dude. What a stupid drum beat.

Don't worry, I know.

And too much compression on the vocals.

But I actually think this might be one of my most promising songs. I'm going to try to add a (real) bass guitar and a few more tape echo-type guitar tracks. I like the interwoven sound thus far.

I also think the lyrics have potential, as they contain a lot more imagery than most of my songs. But I'm still working up some more verses and some changes to the existing structure...

Is the strummed guitar too much in the chorus? It seems to muddy things up, but I also like the effect. Maybe a mixing issue...



Lyrics:

Wake me from my slumber with your gaze of steel
On the broken glass of shattered dreams I guess I'll kneel
I never thought I'd get this far with you and me
And now it's time to go
This way
Cause I don't know (I'll probably change this line...)

Have you ever seen the moon wrestle with the sun
For it's precious birthright
Cause I've seen that fight
And I don't know if I can take it anymore (also being changed)
Have you ever seen the moon's beams
Startled by the break of day
Cause I've seen that way (also being changed)